Overall these are really busy. Think about the experience of walking or driving past one of the these. What would you be able to focus on, if anything?
Why are you repeating patterns on each side, creating this mirrored effect? What's the meaning of that? I would work on simplification, creating a striking simple moment. Also, try some where the quote is just written normally, no tricks in the language. It would be good to try both approaches.
Jessica
ReplyDeleteOverall these are really busy. Think about the experience of walking or driving past one of the these. What would you be able to focus on, if anything?
Why are you repeating patterns on each side, creating this mirrored effect? What's the meaning of that? I would work on simplification, creating a striking simple moment. Also, try some where the quote is just written normally, no tricks in the language. It would be good to try both approaches.